Some days I feel so stupid
Some days I feel so right
Although it happens so very little
I try to stay calm through the night
You think it might be simple
To get through all those things
But its really not that that simple
To predict what the future brings
They say you cant truly look forward
If you keep your mind in the past
They even say forget what happened
So then the pain wont last
I wonder if those people
Really understood the advice they gave
Or if they just said those things
And took the truth to their grave
Everyone likes to sugarcoat it all
And try protecting us from the blast
When the truth is that we only learn
From our experiences in the past
If you forget the things you did
You would not be who you are today
Because without that experience
You would forget or replay
In the end the only way you learn
Is through trial, error and observation
You can never really live your life
If you remain in preservation
















Comments
Suggestions for this piece- First of all, in stanza two, I don't like the repetition of simple. That's not to say you can't keep it, but it detracted from the poem for me.
Second of all is just to be careful and watch your meter- it seems like you're going for a structured rhymed poem here, and while most lines are very balanced, at least one line a stanza stuck out to me as being arhythmic or as missing a beat or having an extra one. I would advise you to speak the poem aloud while tapping your finger in a rhythm, it might help you find the areas that are a little off.
Good job! I hope to see more from you!
--
This is me, I know who I am
I know just where I want to be
and at this very moment
the only person I can be, is me.
~ By Me, last stanza from 'This is Me'
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